Earlier in the month we asked for fifty words from a friend, some of which were used for an earlier prompt. Today we were asked to return to those words, cut them up and move them around for a "word salad". So - I thought I would do two poems, one using all the words with as few others as possible, say, less than a hundred in total, and one of fifty couplets with one of the words in each line. The best laid plans...
I abandoned both ideas. After all the best salads have a few ingredients and a fabulous dressing. Too many ingredients just confuse the palate.
I thought I had the beginnings of an interesting piece, but I have been wrestling with it all day and can't get it into the shape I want. I think it needs a snappy ending and I don't have one. I moved a line or two from the end to the middle so it is not quite as open-ended as it was, but I still don't like it the way it is.
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My words were fifty, kettle, weather, rhinestone and queen.
Fifty Kettle Weather
In a ramshackle hut with a leaking roof
Ted sits and strums his guitar
Every kettle and bucket and saucepan
catching the drips on the floor.
Sally dances and twirls for her sweetheart
as he plinks and plunks with the rain.
"It's fifty kettle weather" he yodels
"I'm a rhinestone cowboy
and you're my dancing queen."
Sunday, April 19, 2009
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2 comments:
I quite love it!
yep. i quite love it too!
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