Wednesday, April 14, 2010

NaPoWriMo #14

(All NaPoWriMo poems have now been removed for possible editing and submissions. Contact me if you would like to read them.)

For Sarah's prompt at readwritepoem.

The first line (which was given) fitted quite well with some lines I had already jotted down. I think it's still a little incoherent - May is going to be a big revision month!

5 comments:

briarcat said...

I like your part of the beginning, and the end is wonderful.

(noticed your note on rwp about layout. I have problems with wordpress, too. for simple things, sometimes you can set things where you want them with periods or dashes, then change their color to white so they disappear on the page. It's clunky, but always works)

Zeborah said...

I love the last three lines. I almost think that:

The darkest hour is sometimes before the dawn,
but sometimes it is not.
In the neon cities, there are those
who have never seen the stars.
It is never more dark than that.


could stand as a poem by itself.

Kay McKenzie Cooke. said...

That lat line is a real clincher. Perfect.

poemblaze said...

Wonderful poem. A lot of beautiful phrasing throughout.

Irene said...

Catherine, beautiful poem. I know you get to see a lot of the stars where you are.